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Chaos Machine

by Mr Daax ⌂ @, aka: SSG Daax, Thursday, April 11, 2013, 09:47 (4004 days ago) @ Claude Errera

A weapon from eons gone by
Lies dormant, a ring in the sky
When along comes a green
Armored chaos machine
Who destroys it with his lovely AI


This is nearly perfect - but the 'it' in the final sentence screws the meter. You should consider dropping it. :) (Still works nicely as a limerick without it.)

A weapon from eons gone by
Lies dormant, a ring in the sky
When along comes a green
Armored chaos machine
Who nukes the old halo goodbye

*I really wanted to include Cortana, but I probably would have just re-written the whole thing.


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