Chaos Machine

by Mr Daax , aka: SSG Daax, Thursday, April 11, 2013, 09:47 (4243 days ago) @ Claude Errera

A weapon from eons gone by
Lies dormant, a ring in the sky
When along comes a green
Armored chaos machine
Who destroys it with his lovely AI

This is nearly perfect - but the 'it' in the final sentence screws the meter. You should consider dropping it. :) (Still works nicely as a limerick without it.)

A weapon from eons gone by
Lies dormant, a ring in the sky
When along comes a green
Armored chaos machine
Who nukes the old halo goodbye

*I really wanted to include Cortana, but I probably would have just re-written the whole thing.

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The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - ncsuDuncan, 2013-04-10, 20:15
- Cyborg theme - Xenos, 2013-04-10, 20:47
  - Gnop? - ncsuDuncan, 2013-04-10, 20:50
    - Nailed it! - Xenos, 2013-04-10, 20:51
  - Alternate version - Xenos, 2013-04-11, 09:38
- Okay, now I'm even more stumped than the haiku one... - ZackDark, 2013-04-10, 20:54
- Enter as many times as we want? Okaaaaay! :p - Ragashingo, 2013-04-10, 21:02
- Chaos Machine - Mr Daax, 2013-04-10, 21:33
  - Chaos Machine - Claude Errera, 2013-04-11, 05:43
    - Chaos Machine - Mr Daax, 2013-04-11, 09:47
- A tragic tale. - SigbiasSilva, 2013-04-10, 21:44
- Halo, Home - Mr Daax, 2013-04-10, 23:10
- The Desert Fox - Grizzlei, 2013-04-10, 23:13
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Kermit, 2013-04-11, 05:58
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - ManKitten, 2013-04-11, 06:52
  - Love it. - Malagate, 2013-04-11, 08:04
- mytherick - pooberry, 2013-04-11, 07:33
- Gnop - Dean Hofmeyer (unhh), 2013-04-11, 07:38
- hb - pooberry, 2013-04-11, 07:43
  - This. - Malagate, 2013-04-11, 08:03
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Tawpgun, 2013-04-11, 09:05
  - The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - ncsuDuncan, 2013-04-11, 18:26
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - CaneCutter, 2013-04-11, 15:49
  - excellent! - Kermit, 2013-04-11, 16:26
- Marathon 2 - Free at Last, 2013-04-11, 17:49
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Cody Miller, 2013-04-11, 19:51
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - MrPadraig08, 2013-04-11, 21:48
  - Tank, load the jump program. - Xenos, 2013-04-11, 21:57
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Arithmomaniac, 2013-04-12, 12:51
  - And a few more - Arithmomaniac, 2013-04-14, 13:10
    - Yes! - Mr Daax, 2013-04-14, 13:30
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Jillybean, 2013-04-14, 14:29
  - The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Cody Miller, 2013-04-14, 17:45
    - The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Jillybean, 2013-04-15, 03:48
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        The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - SonofMacPhisto, 2013-04-19, 09:52
- How colorful - Mr Daax, 2013-04-14, 19:29
  - Damn you, stealing my masterpieces! =P - ZackDark, 2013-04-14, 19:35
    - I couldn't resist! - Mr Daax, 2013-04-14, 20:31
- "That's it, then" - Kermit, 2013-04-14, 19:40
- Halo: CE - Cold, 2013-04-15, 08:28
- I am terrible at these - Beorn, 2013-04-15, 17:32
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - ZackDark, 2013-04-15, 17:56
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - RaichuKFM, 2013-04-15, 17:57
  - The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - ncsuDuncan, 2013-04-15, 19:22
    - The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Xenos, 2013-04-15, 20:11
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - Stephen Laughlin, 2013-04-15, 23:43
- Here we go. - Chewbaccawakka, 2013-04-16, 00:08
- Yikes! - breitzen, 2013-04-16, 14:19
- Just Two - Ragashingo, 2013-04-16, 15:52
- The DBO Challenge - Week 4: Legacy Limericks. - INSANEdrive, 2013-04-18, 11:42
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