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Destiny Christmas Fan Fiction Contest! (Destiny)

by Ragashingo ⌂, Official DBO Cryptarch, Tuesday, December 24, 2013, 23:18 (3985 days ago) @ mynameisbyf

Wow! This story had a lot of emotion for how little action and movement there actually was. For two characters who did little more than dig in the snow then look up at the stars you filled in their thoughts and pasts quite well! I also liked how you worked in the greens and reds of Christmas into the ending imagery. There were a few grammar issues here and there, some typos and some word choices and repetition that didn't agree with me, but those were minor compared to your accomplishment of giving life to two characters standing in the woods.


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