An Europan Christmas (Destiny)

by Hawki , Wednesday, December 25, 2013, 14:20 (3984 days ago) @ Ragashingo

Thanks for the review.

You make some good points, and in case it isn't obvious, I found myself struggling to keep everything under 2,000 words. For what it's worth, the idea in the story is that Hal is acting far worse than usual, that calling Artemis "not human" is out of the blue, hence why it's so affronting to her. As for Alli, she's specifically a female Titan that isn't part of the team that Hal has a thing with. Thing with all these characters is that I've written for them all before (Alli included), but reasoned that for a story pushing 2000 words, I had to go with the implication of who she was as a buff for Hal's character.

Probably coming off as excuses, but they're the answers. Appreciate the critique all the same though, as while I do a lot of writing, Destiny included, not used to word limits in this manner.

Anyway, thanks again.